I’d have thanked a sunny day
if rain had not befallen a road,
if the rain hadn’t become beautiful
as if she herself had been the rain
and then if the rain had not distracted me,
if hallucinations hadn’t paused and caused:
a vision of a bird on a porch, then I’d have
praised a sunny empty day, but the patter
seemed like an omen, and
I knew I had to take an exit ramp
to visit her ranch with a porch.
In praise of rain, and reigning shelter
you cared for me,
and a sick bird there
still wet, yet I
will not thank a sunny day, but
I’ll love all the chirps and songs of you
in the reigning beauty of rain.
OK, I re-read this and the rhythm is awkward and atrocious. I have to fix something. I don’t know when.
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I think it’s a beautiful poem. Chirps and songs are always a nice ending note.
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Thanks very much. I think I’ve figured out how to fix the rhythm a little:
I’d have thanked a sunny day
if rain had not befallen a road,
if the rain had not become a beauty
as if she herself had been the rain
and then if the rain had not distracted me,
if hallucinations hadn’t paused and caused:
a vision of a bird on a porch, then I’d have
praised a sunny empty day, but a patter
seemed like an omen, and
I knew I had to take an exit ramp
to visit the porch of her ranch.
In praise of rain, and reigning shelter
you cared for me,
and a sick bird there
still wet, yet I
will not thank a sunny day, but
I’ll love all the chirps and songs of you
in the reigning beauty of rain.
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It does sound smoother now. I like that the hallucinations paused and caused a vision.
Sometimes the most interesting things occur when the mind decides to show you things.
Beautiful poem ♡
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Thanks. Yes, I remember reading in a parapsychology journal of a researcher who was going home in his car along his usual route when he suddenly had a vision of birds right before his correct exit on the highway. He knew that the nearest exit (not the correct one) was where he once went to see a bird sanctuary. He decided on the spot to turn down the wrong exit to see if it meant anything… He later found out that there was a bad accident at the correct exit. Had he taken the correct exit, he would have been involved in an accident.
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